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[Adrian Clyde]

I was bored at work, so I decided to write a song. I had never written a song before. Check it out! Let the flaming begin.


New York State of Mind

I was so naïve to think that I was invincible
What I am is a lonely stray, sniffing high and low for a bone
Oh, great Titanic, you're unsinkable
Here I tremble in the cold as my heart turns to solid stone

La la la la la la la
La la la la
La la la la la la la
La la la la

Got to keep running, boy you got to keep running, what did you stop running for?
Got to keep digging, boy you got to keep digging, got to dig 'til you reach the core

We all shed tears, we all got fears, we all get butterflies
We all fall down, round, round, round, how else do you learn to fly?

You are who you are, it's incredible, don't let it drag you down
We are who we are, it's inevitable, some will shake your ground

La la la la la la la
La la la la
La la la la la la la
La la la la

Soaring so high above cloud nine
Tired of standing in line
Someday I'll make you mine
But 'til that time
New York state of mind

The boy looks far into the future
Understands now what his mind can do
The boy found a purse full of treasure
Careful now before he steps on you

If the boy had a nickel for every sucker
who stomped him down in the grain
He'd own a castle as high as Mt Everest
With no damn reason to frown again

You are who you are, it's incredible, don't let it drag you down
We are who we are, it's inevitable, some will shake your ground


Soaring so high above cloud nine
Tired of standing in line
Someday I'll make you mine
But 'til that time
New York state of mind

Soaring so high above cloud nine
Tired of standing in line
Someday I'll make you mine
But 'til that time
New York state of mind

Small, everything's gotten so very small
How did I end up here?
Everyone's gotten so very little
Is the end near?

New York state of mind
(soaring above cloud nine)
New York state of mind)
(tired of standing in line)
New York state of mind
(waiting for the time)
New York state of mind
(I'll make you mine)

New York state of mind
(soaring above cloud nine)
New York state of mind)
(tired of standing in line)
New York state of mind
(waiting for the time)
New York state of mind
(I'll make you mine)

You are who you are (La la la la la la la)
We are who we are (La la la la)
You are who you are (La la la la la la la)
We are who we are (La la la la)

La la la la la la la
La la la la
La la la la la la la
La la la la

This post has been edited by Adrian Clyde: Jan 26 2012, 01:01 AM

[RPG_Lover]

I don't know Songs to well but writing is something I do. Not bad though when I first read my mind played it like a rap song. Though you never mention what type of song it is so what people think the song is like is depends on what it looks like. Though there was a line that I think you need to correct.

Got to get keep running, boy you got to keep running, why did you stop running for?

"Got to get keep running?" why not change it to "Got to keep running"
"why did you stop running for?" why not change it to "what did you stop running for?" or "why did you stop running?"

Other then that it is not really bad. But I take it your not going to make much in the way of songs by my guess.

[Adrian Clyde]

I might write some songs again in my spare time. It really is a lot harder than I thought it would be, but it's also a lot of fun, especially when it's done. =P

As far as tempo goes, I was thinking something upbeat and dance-y. An electronic song with minor trance influences.

[RPG_Lover]

I see you did correct those 2 problems. And I would like to see your next song when done and ya. I will agree even though I never really made a song I am a story writer who understand the building something from scratch is tricky. But now all you got to do is either make a song of it or find someone to do it. Who knows maybe someone would do it.