QUOTE (GoldLeo @ Apr 3 2012, 04:50 PM)
Evidently I need work. Anyway, here's some clarification:
First one- This was intended as a lampshade on the fact that the main character wears the same outfit throughout the entire game- In this case, thick winter clothing.
Second one- Winter is sort of that one antagonist who you keep running into. If you've ever played a Pokemon game, the best way to describe him is more competent than Team Rocket but not as effective as Team Galactic.
Third One- This occurs at the end of a conversation with some character development on some of the main characters. Valden's revelation in particular is tense, so I threw this in to lighten the mood a little.
The fourth one I don't think needs explanation.
The fifth one- In response to the question of what fourth wall meant, a fourth wall joke is when the characters acknowlegde the fact they're in a work of fiction.
Hope this helps, but yeah, those first two aren't very good.
Now that you given the situations, I can see how these would be effective. I assume the the first joke occurs halfway or 3/4'ths the way through your game. If you pulled it out in the beginning, It wouldn't have the same effect because you just meet the character. though I find the second one to be a little unnecessary, but thats only my thoughts. the other's ones are fine and perfect the way they are, to me anyways.
QUOTE (m4uesviecr @ Apr 5 2012, 07:30 AM)
For the revised jokes, it feels as if you have done this thing that a lot of young, rpg maker developers (me included) do with dialogue: Have people talk incessantly.
Just too clarify, but I think you might have misunderstood the revised jokes. Those were posted by another guy and giving examples of how he would have done it better, it wasn't the OP's revision of the jokes. If you already knew this then I apologize, it just seemed you misunderstood who wrote that post.
but i agree, I found the original to be better just because it was just a small event that didn't make the joke too long. but like I said earlier it depends on the situations these jokes are made.