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[kiruha]

Warning! Some of this information may contain extreme amounts of information that will overfill your cranium. In case brain freeze occurs, minimize the page, get a glass of cool Orange (or whatever you prefer) Juice, wait a couple minutes, and get back to the story. Any other problems should be reported via "reply to this post" or PM Kiruha. Thanks! Enjoy the story!

Update

• Added userbar!
• Removed Title suggestions
• Added "History" section
• Added "Side" characters
• Added Character Pictures

Motivation
This is my first game that I will be creating. It will be about growing up, and choosing a career for life. It is also my Senior Project for school, because I too am going to graduate this june (hopefully), and will have to decide on a career.

The title is still a work in progress. I have made up my mind to keep the current title, because of it's originality and because I can initial it: RMR
I would still love any suggestions.

Story

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History

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Thousands of years ago, a great disturbance shook the Earth which led to many disasters. The remaining people gathered together on a island which they named Lyura (meaning peaceful place). The population soon grew and started to civilize. People split into tribes, and villages became big trading centers. Soon conflicts came about, leading to brutal warfare.

To stop the tribes from fighting, a group of strong warriors formed the "Hero Guild", which successfully overthrew all the leaders and formed nations. The original "Hero Guild" fell apart. Later on the "Viking Guild" replaced it, gaining fame and creating more nations. But the government banned it from existance and it is now a forgotten underground organization that is negative in people's eyes. Currently, it is being restored in Ostia, and it's main goal is to stop the Mail Business.

Several side guilds formed, the "Pirate Guild" and the "Mercenary Guild". The Mercenary Guild was hired by Dorran Government to be their official army. The Pirate Guild resides in Ruga and constantly abuses the Rugan Government.

Game Story
It has almost been a half-century after the "Heroes" took over, and the 50th Anniversity of Peace is coming closer. But that peace is doomed as a hidden seed of evil finally begans to show it's roots.

In a busy town of Rima, Kronia, there is a special school that chooses the perfect skills for youth. Every year there is a graduation day, in which the graduates become adults and are hired by their skills. The best graduate, know as the golden one, is given a choice to decided their own path. Everyone gives their best to be that one student.

It is only one day left before the 28th graduation party. Kent Joune is one of the graduating students, and he believes that he will be the golden one.
But, during the graduation the rules are bent, and the winner turns out to be Luna, a spoiled girl from the richest family in the town. Kent is placed fourth in the choosing, and is hired by the town's blacksmith to be his apprentice. Doomed to be stuck in Rima forever, Kent looses all self-respect and decides to run away like his older brother Matthew.

But one day, the local mailing company looses one of their employees, and instead of waiting till next year for the graduates, they hire Kent to be the replacement.
A new hope for Kent is found, as he waits for the adventure of his life. He will travel around the island, make friends, stop enemies, discover the past, and stop the government of tomorrow.

The Mailing Business (spoilers!!!)

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As Kent joins the mailing business, he begins to find out evil truth behind the organization, and the government that serves his country.

As a mailman gets better, he is moved up in the ranks, and once he becomes better than half of the mailmen he gets relocated to the Red Station, where he gets more dangerous quests; delivering messages to the enemy, spying, stealing, and assassinating.

Because Kent is a temporary replacement, he moves quicker in the ranks and will soon discover that he is only used for a short period of time, and after that he will be thrown out to die.

He also finds out that his town of Rima is a big experiment to produce high quality workers and solders for the government, because of the hidden war going on between the two major nations of Lyura.

To escape his fate, Kent Searches for the "Viking Guild", the only hope of stopping the evil forces of the Kronian government.

The Nations of Lyura

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Kronia
Government: The Knights
Leader: King Kronus
Hero: Guy
Places: Legios (capital), Rima, Ernest, Pacifa Lobby (a resort for the rich).
Kronia is the second biggest nation on Lyura. It's terrain is steep grassy plains and dark forests. It is currenty in a hidden war with Ostia, because of Ostia's support of "Viking Guild" and it's opposition of the Mail Business. It's freedom status is undefined, because it restricts people to openly travel, but only with escorts that travel from place to place every week. Foreign Visits are strictly controlled too.

Ralor
Government: The Navy
Leader: Ralus
Hero: Toki
Places: Hydria (capital),
Ralor is a peaceful and free country, promoting many small businesses, including the Mail industry. It also hosts a magic tower, where people can harness magic for combat and specialized skills. Rumor is said that the Viking Guild is located here. The terrain is mostly beaches and gressland, but it does have a rocky island that spots an underground mine.

Dorra
Government: The Mercenaries
Leader: Dorcas
Hero: Roland
Places:
Dorra is a minor country ruled by a government that hires Mercenaries for their army. The terrain is desert, with big ancient that store valuable historic information. Other than that, it is an empty place. Recently, it has been negotiating an alliance with Ostia, making it a possible enemy for the Kronians.

Ruga
Government: None (the pirates take control)
Leader: none (last one resigned)
Hero: none
Places: Torpeo (a water city),
Ruga is an another minor country that is in a state of chaos. It hosts a whole city of pirates, and the government is constantly abused by them. The terrain is rocky mountain passes, with a sandy beach on the bottom.

Ostia
Government: The Paladins
Leader: Konstantin
Hero: Hector
Places: Slava (capital),
Ostia is the biggest nation of Lyura. It's terrain is covered deeply with forests, excepth the south which is muddy ground. It's capital Slava contains the biggest wonder, Golden Castle. The country is peaceful and free as far as government control, except for businesses and guilds. It is the only country that openly supports the "Viking Guild". making it harsh friends with Kronia.

Enterra
Government: The Mages
Leader: Entaur
Hero: Imaga
Places: Gorrum (capital)
Enterra is a mysterious country which is feared by many as a place of no return. It is located on a big volcano island far from other countries. Another rumor is that it's capital Gorrum is located in the center of a volcano, with no open entrance. It is a neutral country, but mess with it and it wil lead a full-scale revenge against you.

Characters

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Kent Joune
Age: 16
Weapon: Longswords
Gender: Male
Kent is a silent person. His life in Rima town is boring and pointless. He thinks that he will not become an adult until he leaves the town. He is also very truthful and Dependant, and believes that friends come first, even though he has none.

Luna Merrey
Age: 15
Gender: Female
Weapon: Color Magia
Luna is a daughter of the Richest family in Rima. She is very ignorant and spoiled, and always gets lucky. Even though she is one of the worst students, she gets to be the "Golden One". In many ways she ruins Kent's future, but he sill forgives her and never bears a grudge against her. She does have a friendly side to her which Kent discovers later on, but she hides it because she doesn't want to ruin the reputation of her family.

Eugene
Age: 18
Gender: Male
Weapon: spears
Eugene is a worker in the Ralor Mine, and is a good friend of Kane. He is a very optimistic person, and is like a big brother to Kent, guiding him and giving him a helpful hand. He loves women and to find one is his most important goal.

Zhanna
Age: 17
Gender: Female
Weapon: Axes
Zhanna works in the mailing business, along with Kent. She is curious and funny, but also easily distracted and always worried. Kent first meets her when walking to the border of Ostia, and after that he develops a crush on her.

Kane
Age: 72
Gender: Male
Weapon: Claws
Kane is an elder that was rescued by Kent. To return Kent's favor he introduces him to the Viking's Guild. He is old, but has a youthfulness to him that doesn't stop him from doing his work. He has a long history on his shoulders, but he keeps it to himself.

Matthew Joune
Age: 22
Gender: Male
Weapon: Bows
Matt Joune is the older brother of Kent. One day before his graduation, he ran away from his house and has never been found since. He was very strong and intelligent, and everyday Kent wishes that he would come back.

Raven
Age: 26
Gender: Male
Weapon: Warhammers
Raven is targeted as a dangerous individual who is leading a rebellion against The Kronian government. Nothing is known about him, except that he was the highest ranked mailman before his rebellion.

Gary AKA "Leader"
Age: 56
Gender: Male
Weapon: Full Magia
Gary is the founder of mailing business, and is the right hand of King Kronus. He is a dark character and spends most of his time in an unknown place. He would go missing for months, then would show up to be in the main office. Even though he is Kronus's right-hand man he lives in Ralor, and tries to stay away from Kronus.

Side Characters

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Heath AKA "The Myrmidon"
Age: 17
Gender: Male
Weapon: Katanas
Heath is a wandering swordsman, who deserted his village because of his family tradition. He is has no temper and is very distracted. His goal is to become a great swordsman and come back to his village with pride. At first, he is an enemy to Kent, but later on he joins his party.

Priscilla
Age: 18
Gender: Female
Weapon: Dark Magia
Priscilla is a lonly girl that has been abused by the townspeople calling her "The Witch". She is quiet and odd, but extremly intelligent and deeply emotional. She learned how to use magic by herself, but she does not abuse it's power because of her tragedy that cursed her and made here run away from her village.

Brandon
Age:17
Gender: Male
Weapon: Boomerang
Brandon is a person suffering from memory loss. His main goal is to find his memory and his family. He was washed ashore and taken by pirates, thus making him distrust everyone. But he likes people who treat him as one of theirs. Still, he is a broken person longing for a strong bond of friendship.

Trayton
Age: 19
Gender: Male
Weapon: Guns
Trayton is a Pirate, being first mate of Gray Beard's crew. He is a very happy person despite his harsh circumstances in life. His goal is the become a worl renown pirate captain and sail around the whole island. He is also a Layla's partner.

Layla
Age:18
Gender: Female
Weapon: Knives
Layla is a renown theif in Ruga. She loves treasure and will do anything to get her hands on any. She does not think that stealing is bad, because she grew up in family ruined by poverty, and believes that the poor deserve more. Although she may be pesky, she will be a loyal friend. Her childhood friend is trayton, which she works with.

12 Mailmen

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Sorry, I'll be adding these characters later as I develop them in my cranium! Thanks!!!

Features

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--KCG Day/Night Script
This will make the outside maps more realistic. I don't know whether to make the phases controllable or not, I think it would be easier for to control them but not that realistic. please help me decide, and I would like more information on how to control with this script, like conditional branches and variables.

---Kylock's lighting script
This will add the spice to the Day/Night script. The lights would be useful in town while you are spying, and it will be a good effect for the campfire.

---RPG Tankentai SBS
This script would bring back memories from the final fantasy era. I think this is one of the most enjoyable features, making the fights more epic and less boring.

I will be adding more features, with the proper credits for everybody who coded/translated them!

Thanks everyone! Over time I am going to add more Info, and add screenshots, and a world map!

Wanna support my game? Here is my userbar!

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This post has been edited by kiruha: Dec 18 2008, 05:51 AM

[OverlordVulcan]

PS: Can anyone help me with getting a userbar? Those look really sleek and awesome!!!

I think there's a site called UBDesigner, I may have linked it incorrectly though.

I made my own userbar in photoshop, though some use UBDesigner.

[Jennestia]

Yeah..that's the one I used..I think.

[whizkios]

Quick review after reading your post.

I love the current title, it's very unique and original. The rest are "meh" in comparison, like "A Letter of Your Life" fits more for a novel than a game. Story-wise, up until you talk about Rima, it feels a bit unresolved. It's a bit shaky on why the people on Lyura want to find a way off the island. They have been living together until they figured they were isolated? Do you see where I'm getting? It's awkward, not like they were at war to begin with when they didn't discover that they were isolated or at least that's what I assumed. Might need to embellish upon and clarify that portion of the story. The latter part of your story, Rima to mailman, I like very much. It's a very unique perspective to start off from in a game. Can't say much of the character bios, they are all straightforward. I see you managed to tie most characters to the leading protagonist in some way, which is a good start. Could possibly come up with stronger tie-ins to the main plot.

Overall, great start. I see you mentioned that you'll add more info, I'll be waiting for that. Very unique perspective, tighten up the beginning and it'll be great. Keep up the good work.

[kiruha]

Quick review after reading your post.

I love the current title, it's very unique and original. The rest are "meh" in comparison, like "A Letter of Your Life" fits more for a novel than a game. Story-wise, up until you talk about Rima, it feels a bit unresolved. It's a bit shaky on why the people on Lyura want to find a way off the island. They have been living together until they figured they were isolated? Do you see where I'm getting? It's awkward, not like they were at war to begin with when they didn't discover that they were isolated or at least that's what I assumed. Might need to embellish upon and clarify that portion of the story. The latter part of your story, Rima to mailman, I like very much. It's a very unique perspective to start off from in a game. Can't say much of the character bios, they are all straightforward. I see you managed to tie most characters to the leading protagonist in some way, which is a good start. Could possibly come up with stronger tie-ins to the main plot.

Overall, great start. I see you mentioned that you'll add more info, I'll be waiting for that. Very unique perspective, tighten up the beginning and it'll be great. Keep up the good work.

THanks everyone for the important feedback and the userbar website. As you can see I have added a history section, which will hopefully clear the story misunderstanding. I have also decided to keep the current title. hopefully, Ill accomplish more work and maybe post more information faster.

PS: Please pray so I don't have school tommorow. Yay for snow!