Announcement

[gboichris]

Beginning:A young boy is found in the wilderness by a girl. He don't know how he got there, but he calls himself Prince Sergeo, of the Volcanians. The girl believes him and ask why is he out here. This is where the story begins.

Background:The world of Volcanians dated back many centuries when the end of the world was among the people of earth. Many people were killed when every volcano in the world exploded causing the ultimate crisis. As the lava flowed across the planet a special aura traveled with it and when it touched a human they didn't burn but instead transformed into demons known as Volcanians. For centuries they roamed the planet seeking more power only to be attacked by those who survived the crisis. This caused a major war and in the end the Volcanians won and took control over the planet. Over the years the evil among them begin draining away and they began looking normal and human again. This was due to some of the Volcanians mating with humans. There was still some bad ones that opposed this and slaughtered the humans and cursed the babies that were born. This caused another war and this times the humans won and the evolution for Volcanians were final. This age was anew and now it is the present where evil still murks in the shadows. And that evil is about to emerge again!

Main Characters

(Faces will change)

-Sergeo-
Age: 16
HometownDark Region-Volcanic Kingdom
Background: This is Sergeo the hero of the game.He seeks revenge on his Ultra enemy Vander who killed his entire family.Through out the game he will learn that everything he thought was the truth was nothing but lies.


-Rebecca-
Age:16
HometownDark Region-Unknown
BackgroundRebecca saves Sergeo after he is chased from his home by monsters.She ultimately helps him out on his quest to kill Vander.Like Sergeo Rebecca also lost her parents, but she was very young when they was killed.There's more to Rebecca than meets the eye.


-Tobo-
Age:12
HometownDark Region-Unknown
BackgroundRebecca's little brother who was only a baby when his parents died.Raised by his sister Tobo seems to stay in trouble with the law and his life.At first Tobo seemed like a bad boy that just stay in trouble but overtime he changes.The only thing is, is it for the better or the worst.


-Buro-
Age:18
Hometown:Wind Region-Faire Village
BackgroundA 18 year old warrior to the fullest,Buro is a trained knight who helps Sergeo out on his quest to kill Vander.He never knew his father since he died but his mother is still living and she protects her only son more than anything.


-Ano-
Age:19
Hometown:Earth Region-Catapult Village
BackgroundA scientist who use to work in Volcanic Kingdom.After the destruction he is thought to be dead just like everyone else, but he somehow survives.The real question is how did he survive ?


-Timber-
Age:Unknown
Hometown:Nature Region-Eastshow Woods
BackgroundA mysterious tiger that helps Sergeo out in the beginning.Very little is known about him,but he is never forgotten as the game continues.


-Sandy-
Age:20
Hometown:Fire Region-Middleton Port
BackgroundSandy life turned when she got pregnant at sixteen years old and the father of the baby ran away and never came back.Her parents called her bad names and threw her out on the streets leaving poor Sandy with a daughter that they didn't accept.Sandy left Middleton and settled down in Del Vel Sol Village where some nice people took her in and help Sandy get back on her feet.She soon becomes that towns savior.


-Valeria-
Age:19
Hometown:Earth Region-Maroon Town
BackgroundValeria is a cocky,stubborn,and spoiled brat that's what everyone sees him as.As spoiled as he may be he's also a very caring person and tries to help people in need.Valeria's past definetly affected what he is today and many blame his parents who were too busy with other rich people affairs.


-Bron-
Age:17
HometownDark Region-Desire Slums
BackgroundBron has had the worst life anyone could have,but he stayed strong and continued on his quest to seek revenge on Sergeo.What has Sergeo done to him and why does Bron hate him so ?


-Lucy-
Age:Unknown
Hometown:Unknown
BackgroundLucy's not only a mysterious little kitty,but she can also talk which took the heroes by surprised.After several encounters Lucy joins on the quest to help them destroy the evil pestering the world,but what are her true motives ?


-Vulcan-
Age:Unknown
Hometown:Unknown
BackgroundWho is he and what is his purpose in the world ?

Other Characters


-The King-
Age:42
HometownDark Region-Volcanic Kingdom
BackgroundThe king of Volcanic Kingdom who's trustworthiness got him and the rest of the nobles killed.


-The Queen-
Age:40
HometownDark Region-Iberville Vilage
BackgroundThe Queen of the Kingdom and the mother of Sergeo.She along with the rest of the nobles was killed in a brutal battle in the beginning of the story.More about her is known as you progress through.


-Grandpa-
Age:63
HometownDark Region-Volcanic Kingdom
BackgroundSergeo's grandpa and trainer who has trained Sergeo and his two son's since they was small.All though he won't stay in the story long he's actually one of the most important characters and more is learned about him as the story goes on.


-Village Elder-
Age:61
Hometown:Wind Region-Faire Village
BackgroundThe ruler of Faire Village and the kindness person in the world.The Elder took care of Rebecca and Tobo after the parents died.To them he is their grandfather.


-Captain Gasper-
Age:34
Hometown:Fire Region-Middleton Port
BackgroundThe one with all the Arr in him.He helps the heroes travel the seas with his unfaithful crew and Silver Bird that's what he call his ship.


-Kratz-
Age:18
Hometown:Earth Region-Maroon Town
BackgroundKratz true importance lies in the distant future, but as for now he's a training sky knight.

Villains


-Vander-
Age:Unknown
HometownDark Region-Unknown
BackgroundSergeo's enemy and the main villain of the game.He destroyed Sergeo's entire family.


-Billy-
Age:24
HometownFire Region-Middleton Port
BackgroundSandy's evil brother. It is believed he works for the Dark Circle.


-The Dark Circle-
Mysterious Group of very strong individuals. It is still not known what they're up to, but it's definitely something very evil.
Members
Serviore
Terivan
Elef
Tobatha
Vander(former member)


-Doman-



Age:33
HometownUnknown
BackgroundEx-Leader of X-Squad and main villain in Chapter 2.

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This post has been edited by gboichris: Dec 19 2008, 10:13 AM

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[whizkios]

A quick review after reading your post.

The premise of your story is very unique. I hope in the game you somehow introduce the way Sergeo was lost in the wilderness, because right now it's unresolved and people might question why he's there in the first place. I think a possible solution is to begin your game en media res and then pick up the idea of the beginning. Now the background story, I like how you set volcanoes and lava as an alternate means to the supernatural and mystical that is in RPGs. I assumed when humans turned into Volcanians they were immediately hostile to humans. My question is, do they lose their own humanity and become power hungry? Now with this in mind, you mention that their powers were being drained away and they can mate with other humans. This brings a very interesting twist that some Volcanians still hold onto their humanity and moral nature, something similar to an anime called Xam'd (don't mind me, I like to point out my references). Are there some Volcanians whose powers do not drain or are different than others and can retain it? Keep coming up with ideas to resolve a few of these issues. You can have it explained in-game to avoid putting out too many spoilers here. The whole war idea is a bit "meh," but you're using it to set up for the main story which I think could work out. I'll just have to wait and see how you will direct it.

Your character bios are okay. Not much I can say till I see how they relate to the plot.

Overall, good start, but keep coming up with some ideas that can make your story much stronger. Involve some character plot tie-ins. Keep up the good work.

EDIT: added a few more things to say

This post has been edited by whizkios: Dec 19 2008, 04:38 PM

[gboichris]

Thanks for the great great response, well the story have many unexpected twist that won't be revealed until the game. Also I don't know how I want to start it because this is a remake from my unfinished XP game where the first chapter explains what happened to him. So I'm not sure which way I want to go with it. And since I'm already working on the prologue I think I might go that way, but I plan to make many changes from my disastrous mess I left back on XP.

[Remna K]

Where'd you get those faces?

[gboichris]

Where'd you get those faces?

http://sozaimenu.gozaru.jp/english.html
These were for my XP version though so I won't be using them...also my topic page will look much better I just wanted to get word out for my game.

[gboichris]

Hi guys this game is back out he vault, but I have to star from scratch since my last computer is destroyed and I didnt back my game up.

[Loaded]

How did you enlarge the faces to make them that big?
They look pretty small to me.

Anyways, It looks alright. Good work with the Story and Characters.

[mithos]

Those are xp sized faces. The same ones are available resized for VX on this site (check the resource showcase). Looks good so far

[gboichris]

What he said.